Chapter 3 cover:

woops a paradox!:

nameless henchmen! theyre everywhere!:

kick ass!:

yar mommie's deeeeeeeeeaaahd :

super special awesome ultra special super sexy transformation sequence! not in this page! :

shadow tentacles ive seen so much hentai to know where this is going:

Thou Shalt Not Pass:

is it really over?:

badly drawn marik....SEE? THIS IS EXACTLY WHY I DONT LIKE GUIDELINES :

The introduction of shadows:

badly drawn... everything!:

bye convenient helping side character that explains how kaiba got the rod:

oh he's still lives... ok ima definitely kill it in two pages or so:

super special awesome mspaint effects:

mehehhahahahhahahahahah:

ok i will definitely kill him now, lock on target chaarrge shoot!:

OH COME OOOON! LET ME KILL HIM!:

DAMN IT now i will have to wait for some more pages:

a demon inside kaiba... why am i not surprized:

kill it kill it with devious ancient egyptian dark powers:

yeah yeah yeah bla bla... you guys are boring ima just hit you with some lightning!:

haha!!!! no wait i missed... wait. I KILLED HIM! FINALLY GUUAH! that took a while!!1:

hahahahahah yer all my bitches!:

aww come on, turn that frown upside down. youre dead! what more do you want?:

another goof... great:

ok it might be a little confusing with the panels with this page but hey! everyone is dead what more do you want?:

ok ehm... to be continued.. o.o:

please share your comments, suggestions and criticisms.

The art has noticeably improved from your previous work, i specially liked this page:
http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2014/022/e/f/chapter_4_page_8_i_think_i_ve_uploaded_this_one_b4_by_mrawesome45-d738zqm.jpg

The plot is moderately interesting but i feel more attention should be put towards the audience's susceptibility and the plot's excitement and coherence.

other then that the chapter was pleasant, well done.

Loudfist wrote:

The plot is moderately interesting but i feel more attention should be put towards the audience's susceptibility and the plot's excitement and coherence. 

screw audience's susceptibility i want violence! now that i've declared that.
i noticed how fast the manga is going and how it should hold more chapters to it.
like marik's duel with kaiba seemed like it never happened but again, the story is supposed to be short, i wanted to only to make 5 chapters of it... and i failed to put female characters in the manga for some reason... i plan to fix and clarify everything thats going on as much as possible, i already noticed the flaws i have but i didnt really want to more waste time fixing them, ive fixed so much already. but i promise every chapter is going to be better then the one before! im going to learn how to make backgrounds look more like NOT bunch of lines behind people, i plan to use more programs than mspaint (LOL)
btw this story was a challenge at the beginning "im going to make 1 chapter in only 1 week!" i managed to do it in time, i was proud of it but then i got carried away.

ur awesome

W.O.P.i.E wrote:

ur awesome

this guy gets it xd